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✏️ ์์๋ฌธ์ (Anticipated Question)
๊ด๋ณต ์ดํ ํ๊ตญ ์ฌํ๋ ์งง์ ์๊ฐ์ ์์ฃผ ํฌ๊ฒ ๋ฐ์ ํ์ด์. ํ์ง๋ง ์ด๋ฉด์๋ ํด๊ฒฐํด์ผ ํ ๋ฌธ์ ๋ค๋ ๋ง์ต๋๋ค. ๊ด๋ณต 80์ฃผ๋ ์ ๋ง์ ํ๊ตญ ์ฌํ๊ฐ ์ง๊ธ ๊ฒช๊ณ ์๋ ๋ฌธ์ ๋ค์ ๋งํ๊ณ , ์์ผ๋ก ์ด๋ป๊ฒ ๋ฐ์ ํด์ผ ํ ์ง ์ฌ๋ฌ๋ถ์ ์๊ฐ์ ์จ๋ณด์ธ์. Since liberation, Korean society has developed greatly in a short period. However, there are also many problems that need to be solved. On the 80th anniversary of liberation, talk about the problems Korean society is currently experiencing, and write your thoughts on how it should develop in the future.
✏️ ๋ฌธ์ ํด์ค (Question Analysis)
TOPIK 54๋ฒ ์ฐ๊ธฐ๋ ์ ํด์ง ์ฃผ์ ์ ๋ํด ๋ ผ๋ฆฌ์ ์ผ๋ก ๊ธ์ ์ฐ๋ ์ํ์ ๋๋ค. ์ด ๋ฌธ์ ๋ '์๋ก -๋ณธ๋ก -๊ฒฐ๋ก ' ์ธ ๋ถ๋ถ์ผ๋ก ๋๋์ด ์ฐ๋ ๊ฒ์ด ์ข์ต๋๋ค. ์๋ก ์์๋ ํ๊ตญ์ ๋ฐ์ ์ ๊ฐ๋จํ ์๊ฐํ๊ณ , ๋ณธ๋ก ์์๋ ์ฃผ์ ๋ฌธ์ ์ ๊ณผ ๊ทธ ํด๊ฒฐ ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ์ ํจ๊ป ์ด์ผ๊ธฐํ๋ฉด ๋ฉ๋๋ค. ๋ง์ง๋ง ๊ฒฐ๋ก ์์๋ ์์์ ์ด ๋ด์ฉ์ ์ ๋ฆฌํ๊ณ , ๋ฏธ๋์ ๋ํ ํฌ๋ง์ ์ธ ์๊ฐ์ ๋ณด์ฌ์ฃผ์ธ์. TOPIK Writing Task 54 is a test of your ability to write a logical essay on a given topic. It is best to divide your answer into three parts: 'Introduction, Body, and Conclusion.' In the introduction, briefly introduce Korea's development. In the body, you should discuss the main problems and their solutions together. Finally, in the conclusion, summarize what you've written and share your hopeful thoughts for the future.
ํนํ, ๋ณธ๋ก ์์๋ ๋๋ง ๋ฒ๋๋ผ ๋์ณค๋ ์ฌํ์ ๋ฌธํ์ ๋ฌธ์ ๋ค์ ์์ธํ ๋ค๋ฃจ๋ ๊ฒ์ด ์ข์ต๋๋ค. ์๋ฅผ ๋ค์ด, ๊ฐ๋ํ ์ฌ๋๊ณผ ๋ถ์ ์ฌ์ด์ ์ฐจ์ด, ์์ด๋ฅผ ๋ณ์ง ์๋ ๋ฌธ์ , ๊ฒฝ์์ด ๋๋ฌด ์ฌํ ์ฌํ ๊ฐ์ ๋ฌธ์ ๋ค์ ๋งํ๊ณ , ํด๊ฒฐ ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ์ผ๋ก ์ฌํ ์์ ๋ง์ ๋ ํผํผํ๊ฒ ๋ง๋ค๊ณ , ๋ชจ๋๊ฐ ํจ๊ป ์ ์ฌ๋ ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ์ ์ฐพ๊ณ , ์๋ก ๋๋ ๋ง์์ ๋์ฐพ์๊ณ ์ ์ํ ์ ์์ต๋๋ค. In the body, it's especially good to talk about social and cultural issues that have been overlooked while focusing only on making money. For example, you can mention problems like the difference between the rich and the poor, the low birth rate problem, and an overly competitive society, and suggest solutions like making the social safety net stronger, finding a way for everyone to live well together, and restoring a sense of community.
✏️ ๋ชจ๋ฒ ์์ ๋ต์ (Sample Answer)
์๋ก : ๊ด๋ณต 80๋ ์ด ์ง๋ ์ง๊ธ, ํ๊ตญ์ ๊ฒฝ์ ๋ ๋ฐ์ ํ๊ณ ๋ฏผ์ฃผ์ฃผ์๋ ๋ฐ์ ํด์ ์ ์ธ๊ณ๊ฐ ์ฃผ๋ชฉํ๊ณ ์์ต๋๋ค. ํ์ง๋ง ์ด๋ฐ ๋๋จํ ๋ฐ์ ๋ค์๋ ์ฌ๋ฌ ์ฌ๊ฐํ ์ฌํ ๋ฌธ์ ๋ค์ด ์์ต๋๋ค. ์ด์ ๋ ์ด ๋ฌธ์ ๋ค์ ์ง์งํ๊ฒ ์๊ฐํ๊ณ ์๋ก์ด ๋ฐ์ ๋ฐฉํฅ์ ์ฐพ์์ผ ํ ๋์ ๋๋ค. Introduction: 80 years after liberation, Korea has developed both economically and democratically, attracting global attention. However, behind this great development, there are many serious social problems. Now is the time to seriously think about these problems and find new directions for development.
๋ณธ๋ก : ์ง๊ธ ํ๊ตญ ์ฌํ์ ๊ฐ์ฅ ํฐ ๋ฌธ์ ์ค ํ๋๋ ์ง๋์น ๊ฒฝ์๊ณผ ์ด๋ก ์ธํ ๋น๋ถ ๊ฒฉ์ฐจ์ ๋๋ค. ๋ชจ๋๊ฐ ๋์์ด ๊ฒฝ์ํ๋ฉด์ ์ฌ๋๋ค์ ์ธ๋ก์๊ณผ ๋ถ์์ ๋๋๋๋ค. ์ด๋ฐ ๊ฐ์ ์ ์ฌํ ์ ์ฒด๊ฐ ์๋ก๋ฅผ ๋๋ ๋ง์์ธ ๊ณต๋์ฒด ์์์ ์ฝํ๊ฒ ๋ง๋ค์์ต๋๋ค. ์ด ๋ฌธ์ ๋ฅผ ํด๊ฒฐํ๋ ค๋ฉด ๋จ์ํ ๊ฒฝ์ ์ฑ์ฅ๋ง ์ซ์ ๊ฒ ์๋๋ผ, ๋ชจ๋ ๊ตญ๋ฏผ์ ์ถ์ด ์์ ๋๋๋ก ์ฌํ ์์ ๋ง์ ๋ ํผํผํ๊ฒ ๋ง๋ค์ด์ผ ํฉ๋๋ค. ์๋ฅผ ๋ค์ด, ์ ์์ด์ ์ด๋ฅด์ ์ ์ํ ํน๋ณํ ๋ณต์ง ์ ๋๋ฅผ ๋ง๋ค๊ณ , ์ผ์๋ฆฌ๋ฅผ ๋ ๋ง์ด ๋ง๋ค๊ธฐ ์ํด ๋ ธ๋ ฅํด์ผ ํฉ๋๋ค. Main Body: One of the biggest problems in Korean society now is excessive competition and the resulting gap between the rich and poor. As everyone competes endlessly, people feel lonely and anxious. These feelings have weakened the sense of community, which is the spirit of helping each other. To solve this problem, we shouldn't just pursue economic growth. We must strengthen the social safety net to ensure everyone's life is stable. For example, we need to create special welfare systems for young people and the elderly and work to create more jobs.
๊ฒฐ๋ก : ํ๊ตญ ์ฌํ๋ ์ง๋ 80๋ ์ ์ญ์ฌ๋ฅผ ๋ฐํ์ผ๋ก ์๋กญ๊ฒ ๋์๊ฐ์ผ ํฉ๋๋ค. ๋๋ง ๋ง์ด ๋ฒ๋ ๊ฒ์ ์ง์คํ์ง ์๊ณ , ์ฌํ ๊ตฌ์ฑ์ ๋ชจ๋๊ฐ ์ฌ๋์ผ๋ก์ ์์คํ๊ฒ ์ฌ๊ฒจ์ง๋ฉฐ ์ด ์ ์๋ ์ง์ ๊ฐ๋ฅํ ๋ฐ์ ๋ชจ๋ธ์ ๋ง๋ค์ด์ผ ํฉ๋๋ค. ์ด๋ฐ ๋ ธ๋ ฅ๋ค์ด ๋ชจ์ด๋ฉด ํ๊ตญ์ ๋ฌผ์ง์ ์ผ๋ก๋ ํ์๋กญ๊ณ , ์ ์ ์ ์ผ๋ก๋ ์ฑ์ํ ๋๋ผ๊ฐ ๋ ๊ฒ์ ๋๋ค. Conclusion: Based on its history of the past 80 years, Korean society must move forward in a new way. Instead of focusing only on making a lot of money, we must create a sustainable development model where all members of society can live with dignity as human beings. If these efforts come together, Korea will become a country that is both materially rich and spiritually mature.
✏️ ํต์ฌ ์ดํ ๋ฐ ๋ฌธ๋ฒ (Key Vocabulary and Grammar)
๊ณต๋์ฒด ์์ (gong-dong-che ui-sik)
์๋ฏธ: ์ฌํ์ ํ ์ฌ๋์ผ๋ก์ ๋ค๋ฅธ ์ฌ๋๋ค๊ณผ ์ฐ๊ฒฐ๋์ด ์๋ค๋ ๋๋์ ๋๋ค. Meaning: It's the feeling of being connected with others as a member of society.
์์: - ๊ฐ์ธ์ฃผ์๊ฐ ์ฌํด์ง๋ฉด์ ๊ณต๋์ฒด ์์์ด ์ฝํด์ง๊ณ ์์ต๋๋ค. - As individualism becomes more severe, the sense of community is weakening.
๋น๋ถ ๊ฒฉ์ฐจ (bin-bu gyeok-cha)
์๋ฏธ: ๊ฐ๋ํ ์ฌ๋๊ณผ ๋ถ์ ์ฌ์ด์ ์ฌ์ฐ ์ฐจ์ด๊ฐ ์ ์ ์ปค์ง๋ ํ์์ ๋งํฉ๋๋ค. Meaning: This refers to the phenomenon where the gap in wealth between the poor and the rich is getting wider.
์์: - ๋น๋ถ ๊ฒฉ์ฐจ๋ฅผ ์ค์ด๊ธฐ ์ํด ์ ๋ถ์ ๋ ธ๋ ฅ์ด ํ์ํฉ๋๋ค. - The government's effort is needed to reduce the gap between rich and poor.
~์/๋ฅผ ๋ฐํ์ผ๋ก (~eul/leul ba-tang-eu-ro)
์๋ฏธ: '์ด๋ค ๊ฒ์ ๊ธฐ๋ณธ์ด๋ ๊ทผ๊ฑฐ๋ก ํ์ฌ'๋ผ๋ ๋ป์ ๋๋ค. Meaning: It means 'based on' something as a foundation or reason.
์์: - ์ฐ๋ฆฌ๋ ์ง๋ ์ญ์ฌ๋ฅผ ๋ฐํ์ผ๋ก ๋ ๋์ ๋ฏธ๋๋ฅผ ๋ง๋ค์ด์ผ ํฉ๋๋ค. - We must create a better future based on our past history.
✏️ ์ค๋ ฅ ์ ๊ฒ ๋ฌธ์ (Practice Question)
์๋ ๋น์นธ์ ์๋ง์ ๋จ์ด๋ฅผ ๋ฃ์ด ๋ฌธ์ฅ์ ์์ฑํ์ธ์.
์ฐ๋ฆฌ ์ฌํ๋ ๊ฒฝ์ ์ ๋ฐ์ ๋ง ์๊ฐํ ๊ฒ ์๋๋ผ, ์๋ก ๋๋ ๋ง์์ธ ( )์/๋ฅผ ๋์ฐพ์์ผ ํฉ๋๋ค.
Our society shouldn't just think about economic development, but also needs to restore the ( ) of helping each other.
์ ๋ต: ๊ณต๋์ฒด ์์