TOPIK II ์ฐ๊ธฐ 54๋ฒ ๐ ์์๋ฌธ์ (6)์ธ๊ตญ์ธ ๋ ธ๋ํ๊ฒฝ๊ฐ์ _Writing Question 54: Improving the Working Environment for Foreign Workers
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TOPIK II ์ฐ๊ธฐ 54๋ฒ ์์๋ฌธ์ '์ธ๊ตญ์ธ ๊ทผ๋ก์ ๋ ธ๋ํ๊ฒฝ ๊ฐ์ ' Writing Question 54: Improving the Working Environment for Foreign Workers
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๋ฌธ์ : ์ธ๊ตญ์ธ ๊ทผ๋ก์ ๋
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Q : Explain the problems of the working environment for foreign workers, and discuss social and institutional measures to improve them.
๋ฌธ์ ์ (Problems) ๐จ
์ธ๊ตญ์ธ ๊ทผ๋ก์๋ ์ฐ๋ฆฌ ์ฌํ์ ์ค์ํ ๊ตฌ์ฑ์์ด์ง๋ง, ์ฌ๋ฌ ์ด๋ ค์์ ๊ฒช๊ณ ์์ต๋๋ค. ๊ฐ์ฅ ์ฌ๊ฐํ ๋ฌธ์ ๋ ๐ก **‘์ด์ ํ ๋ ธ๋ํ๊ฒฝ’**๊ณผ **‘์ฐจ๋ณ’**์ ๋๋ค. ๋ง์ ์ธ๊ตญ์ธ ๊ทผ๋ก์๋ค์ด ๋ด๊ตญ์ธ์ ๋นํด ๋ฎ์ ์๊ธ์ ๋ฐ๊ฑฐ๋ ๋ถ๋นํ ๋ ธ๋ ์๊ฐ์ ๊ฐ์๋นํ๊ณ ์์ต๋๋ค. ๋ํ, ๋ฌธํ์ ·์ธ์ด์ ์ฐจ์ด๋ก ์ธํด ์ง์ฅ ๋ด ๊ดด๋กญํ์ด๋ ์ธ๊ถ ์นจํด์ ๋ ธ์ถ๋๋ ๊ฒฝ์ฐ๋ ๋น๋ฒํ ๋ฐ์ํฉ๋๋ค. ์ด๋ฌํ ๋ฌธ์ ๋ค์ ๋จ์ํ ๊ฐ์ธ์ ๊ณ ํต์ ๊ทธ์น์ง ์๊ณ , ์ฌํ์ ๊ฐ๋ฑ์ ์ผ๊ธฐํ๋ ์์ธ์ด ๋๊ธฐ๋ ํฉ๋๋ค.
Foreign workers are an important part of our society, but they face many difficulties. The most serious problems are **'poor working conditions'** and **'discrimination'**. Many foreign workers receive lower wages or are forced to work unfair hours compared to their domestic counterparts. In addition, due to cultural and linguistic differences, they are often exposed to workplace harassment or human rights violations. These problems do not just cause individual suffering, but can also lead to social conflict.
๊ฐ์ ๋ฐฉ์ (Ways to Improve) ๐ค
์ธ๊ตญ์ธ ๊ทผ๋ก์์ ๋ ธ๋ํ๊ฒฝ์ ๊ฐ์ ํ๊ธฐ ์ํด์๋ ์ฌํ์ ๋ ธ๋ ฅ๊ณผ ์ ๋์ ๋ท๋ฐ์นจ์ด ๋ณํ๋์ด์ผ ํฉ๋๋ค. ์ฒซ์งธ, **‘์ ๋ถ์ ์ ๊ทน์ ์ธ ๊ฐ๋ ๊ณผ ๊ท์ ’**๊ฐ ํ์ํฉ๋๋ค. ์ธ๊ตญ์ธ ๊ทผ๋ก์ ๊ณ ์ฉ ์ฌ์ ์ฅ์ ๋ํ ์ ๊ธฐ์ ์ธ ์ ๊ฒ์ ํตํด ๋ ธ๋๋ฒ ์ค์ ์ฌ๋ถ๋ฅผ ํ์ธํ๊ณ , ์๋ฐ ์ ๊ฐ๋ ฅํ ์ฒ๋ฒ์ ๋ถ๊ณผํด์ผ ํฉ๋๋ค. ๋์งธ, **‘์ฌํ ๊ตฌ์ฑ์๋ค์ ์ธ์ ๊ฐ์ ’**์ด ์ค์ํฉ๋๋ค. ๋ค๋ฌธํ ๊ต์ก๊ณผ ์บ ํ์ธ์ ํตํด ์ธ๊ตญ์ธ ๊ทผ๋ก์๋ฅผ ๋๋ฑํ ์ฌํ ๊ตฌ์ฑ์์ผ๋ก ์กด์คํ๊ณ ํฌ์ฉํ๋ ๋ฌธํ๋ฅผ ๋ง๋ค์ด์ผ ํฉ๋๋ค.
In order to improve the working environment for foreign workers, social efforts and institutional support must go hand in hand. First, **‘active government supervision and regulation’** are needed. Through regular inspections of businesses that employ foreign workers, it is necessary to check for compliance with labor laws and impose strong penalties for violations. Second, **‘improving the awareness of social members’** is important. Through multicultural education and campaigns, we must create a culture that respects and embraces foreign workers as equal members of society.
ํต์ฌ ์ดํ ✏️ Core Vocabulary
๋น๋ฒํ๋ค (bin-beon-ha-da): ์์ฃผ ์ผ์ด๋๊ฑฐ๋ ์ผ์ ํ ๊ฐ๊ฒฉ์ ๋๊ณ ๋ฐ๋ณต๋๋ค. (Occurring frequently or repeatedly at regular intervals.)
๋ณํ๋๋ค (byeong-haeng-doe-da): ๋ ๊ฐ์ง ์ด์์ ์ผ์ด ๋์์ ํจ๊ป ์ด๋ฃจ์ด์ง๋ค. (Two or more things are done simultaneously.)
ํฌ์ฉํ๋ค (po-yong-ha-da): ๋จ์ ๋์ ๋ง์์ผ๋ก ๊ฐ์ธ์ฃผ๋ค. (To embrace and accept others with an open mind.)
์นํธํค ๋ฌธ์ฅ ํํ ๐ Cheat-Key Sentence Expressions
~์ ๊ทธ์น์ง ์๊ณ : "~์์ ๋ฉ์ถ์ง ์๊ณ , ๋ ๋์๊ฐ"๋ผ๋ ์๋ฏธ๋ก, ๋ฌธ์ ์ ํ๊ธ ํจ๊ณผ๋ฅผ ์ค๋ช ํ ๋ ์ ์ฉํฉ๋๋ค. (Useful for explaining the ripple effect of a problem, meaning "not stopping at ~, but going further.")
~์/๊ณผ ๋ณํ๋์ด์ผ ํ๋ค: "~์ ํจ๊ป ์ด๋ฃจ์ด์ ธ์ผ ํ๋ค"๋ ์๋ฏธ๋ก, ํด๊ฒฐ์ฑ ์ ์ ์ํ ๋ ๋ค๊ฐ์ ์ธ ์ ๊ทผ์ด ํ์ํจ์ ๊ฐ์กฐํ ๋ ์ฌ์ฉ๋ฉ๋๋ค. (Used to emphasize that a multi-faceted approach is needed when proposing solutions, meaning "must be carried out in parallel with ~.")
~๋ฅผ/์ ์ผ๊ธฐํ๋ค: "~์ ์ผ์ผํค๋ค, ์ด๋ํ๋ค"์ ๊ฐ์ ์๋ฏธ๋ก, ๋ถ์ ์ ์ธ ๊ฒฐ๊ณผ๋ฅผ ๊ฐ์กฐํ ๋ ์ฌ์ฉ๋ฉ๋๋ค. (Used to emphasize a negative outcome, meaning "to cause or bring about ~.")
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