TOPIK II ์“ฐ๊ธฐ 54๋ฒˆ ๐Ÿ“„ ์˜ˆ์ƒ๋ฌธ์ œ(6)์™ธ๊ตญ์ธ ๋…ธ๋™ํ™˜๊ฒฝ๊ฐœ์„  _Writing Question 54: Improving the Working Environment for Foreign Workers

TOPIK II ์“ฐ๊ธฐ 54๋ฒˆ: ์™ธ๊ตญ์ธ ๊ทผ๋กœ์ž ๋…ธ๋™ํ™˜๊ฒฝ ๊ฐœ์„  | Writing Question 54: Improving the Working Environment for Foreign Workers

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Conquer TOPIK 54! Follow along step-by-step ๐Ÿ“

TOPIK II ์“ฐ๊ธฐ 54๋ฒˆ ์˜ˆ์ƒ๋ฌธ์ œ '์™ธ๊ตญ์ธ ๊ทผ๋กœ์ž ๋…ธ๋™ํ™˜๊ฒฝ ๊ฐœ์„ ' Writing Question 54: Improving the Working Environment for Foreign Workers

TOPIK II WRITING Q54
์™ธ๊ตญ์ธ ๊ทผ๋กœ์ž

๋ชจ๋ฒ” ๋‹ต์•ˆ ๋ฐ ํ•ด์„ค Example Answer & Explanation

๋ฌธ์ œ: ์™ธ๊ตญ์ธ ๊ทผ๋กœ์ž ๋…ธ๋™ํ™˜๊ฒฝ์˜ ๋ฌธ์ œ์ ์„ ์„ค๋ช…ํ•˜๊ณ , ์ด๋ฅผ ๊ฐœ์„ ํ•˜๊ธฐ ์œ„ํ•œ ์‚ฌํšŒ์ ·์ œ๋„์  ๋ฐฉ์•ˆ์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ๋…ผ์ˆ ํ•˜์‹œ์˜ค.

Q : Explain the problems of the working environment for foreign workers, and discuss social and institutional measures to improve them.

๋ฌธ์ œ์  (Problems) ๐Ÿšจ

์™ธ๊ตญ์ธ ๊ทผ๋กœ์ž๋Š” ์šฐ๋ฆฌ ์‚ฌํšŒ์˜ ์ค‘์š”ํ•œ ๊ตฌ์„ฑ์›์ด์ง€๋งŒ, ์—ฌ๋Ÿฌ ์–ด๋ ค์›€์„ ๊ฒช๊ณ  ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๊ฐ€์žฅ ์‹ฌ๊ฐํ•œ ๋ฌธ์ œ๋Š” ๐Ÿ’ก **‘์—ด์•…ํ•œ ๋…ธ๋™ํ™˜๊ฒฝ’**๊ณผ **‘์ฐจ๋ณ„’**์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋งŽ์€ ์™ธ๊ตญ์ธ ๊ทผ๋กœ์ž๋“ค์ด ๋‚ด๊ตญ์ธ์— ๋น„ํ•ด ๋‚ฎ์€ ์ž„๊ธˆ์„ ๋ฐ›๊ฑฐ๋‚˜ ๋ถ€๋‹นํ•œ ๋…ธ๋™ ์‹œ๊ฐ„์„ ๊ฐ•์š”๋‹นํ•˜๊ณ  ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋˜ํ•œ, ๋ฌธํ™”์ ·์–ธ์–ด์  ์ฐจ์ด๋กœ ์ธํ•ด ์ง์žฅ ๋‚ด ๊ดด๋กญํž˜์ด๋‚˜ ์ธ๊ถŒ ์นจํ•ด์— ๋…ธ์ถœ๋˜๋Š” ๊ฒฝ์šฐ๋„ ๋นˆ๋ฒˆํžˆ ๋ฐœ์ƒํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ด๋Ÿฌํ•œ ๋ฌธ์ œ๋“ค์€ ๋‹จ์ˆœํžˆ ๊ฐœ์ธ์˜ ๊ณ ํ†ต์— ๊ทธ์น˜์ง€ ์•Š๊ณ , ์‚ฌํšŒ์  ๊ฐˆ๋“ฑ์„ ์•ผ๊ธฐํ•˜๋Š” ์›์ธ์ด ๋˜๊ธฐ๋„ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.

Foreign workers are an important part of our society, but they face many difficulties. The most serious problems are **'poor working conditions'** and **'discrimination'**. Many foreign workers receive lower wages or are forced to work unfair hours compared to their domestic counterparts. In addition, due to cultural and linguistic differences, they are often exposed to workplace harassment or human rights violations. These problems do not just cause individual suffering, but can also lead to social conflict.

๊ฐœ์„  ๋ฐฉ์•ˆ (Ways to Improve) ๐Ÿค

์™ธ๊ตญ์ธ ๊ทผ๋กœ์ž์˜ ๋…ธ๋™ํ™˜๊ฒฝ์„ ๊ฐœ์„ ํ•˜๊ธฐ ์œ„ํ•ด์„œ๋Š” ์‚ฌํšŒ์  ๋…ธ๋ ฅ๊ณผ ์ œ๋„์  ๋’ท๋ฐ›์นจ์ด ๋ณ‘ํ–‰๋˜์–ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ฒซ์งธ, **‘์ •๋ถ€์˜ ์ ๊ทน์ ์ธ ๊ฐ๋…๊ณผ ๊ทœ์ œ’**๊ฐ€ ํ•„์š”ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์™ธ๊ตญ์ธ ๊ทผ๋กœ์ž ๊ณ ์šฉ ์‚ฌ์—…์žฅ์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ์ •๊ธฐ์ ์ธ ์ ๊ฒ€์„ ํ†ตํ•ด ๋…ธ๋™๋ฒ• ์ค€์ˆ˜ ์—ฌ๋ถ€๋ฅผ ํ™•์ธํ•˜๊ณ , ์œ„๋ฐ˜ ์‹œ ๊ฐ•๋ ฅํ•œ ์ฒ˜๋ฒŒ์„ ๋ถ€๊ณผํ•ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋‘˜์งธ, **‘์‚ฌํšŒ ๊ตฌ์„ฑ์›๋“ค์˜ ์ธ์‹ ๊ฐœ์„ ’**์ด ์ค‘์š”ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋‹ค๋ฌธํ™” ๊ต์œก๊ณผ ์บ ํŽ˜์ธ์„ ํ†ตํ•ด ์™ธ๊ตญ์ธ ๊ทผ๋กœ์ž๋ฅผ ๋™๋“ฑํ•œ ์‚ฌํšŒ ๊ตฌ์„ฑ์›์œผ๋กœ ์กด์ค‘ํ•˜๊ณ  ํฌ์šฉํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฌธํ™”๋ฅผ ๋งŒ๋“ค์–ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.

In order to improve the working environment for foreign workers, social efforts and institutional support must go hand in hand. First, **‘active government supervision and regulation’** are needed. Through regular inspections of businesses that employ foreign workers, it is necessary to check for compliance with labor laws and impose strong penalties for violations. Second, **‘improving the awareness of social members’** is important. Through multicultural education and campaigns, we must create a culture that respects and embraces foreign workers as equal members of society.

ํ•ต์‹ฌ ์–ดํœ˜ ✏️ Core Vocabulary

๋นˆ๋ฒˆํ•˜๋‹ค (bin-beon-ha-da): ์ž์ฃผ ์ผ์–ด๋‚˜๊ฑฐ๋‚˜ ์ผ์ •ํ•œ ๊ฐ„๊ฒฉ์„ ๋‘๊ณ  ๋ฐ˜๋ณต๋˜๋‹ค. (Occurring frequently or repeatedly at regular intervals.)

๋ณ‘ํ–‰๋˜๋‹ค (byeong-haeng-doe-da): ๋‘ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ์ด์ƒ์˜ ์ผ์ด ๋™์‹œ์— ํ•จ๊ป˜ ์ด๋ฃจ์–ด์ง€๋‹ค. (Two or more things are done simultaneously.)

ํฌ์šฉํ•˜๋‹ค (po-yong-ha-da): ๋‚จ์„ ๋„“์€ ๋งˆ์Œ์œผ๋กœ ๊ฐ์‹ธ์ฃผ๋‹ค. (To embrace and accept others with an open mind.)

์น˜ํŠธํ‚ค ๋ฌธ์žฅ ํ‘œํ˜„ ๐Ÿ“ Cheat-Key Sentence Expressions

~์— ๊ทธ์น˜์ง€ ์•Š๊ณ : "~์—์„œ ๋ฉˆ์ถ”์ง€ ์•Š๊ณ , ๋” ๋‚˜์•„๊ฐ€"๋ผ๋Š” ์˜๋ฏธ๋กœ, ๋ฌธ์ œ์˜ ํŒŒ๊ธ‰ ํšจ๊ณผ๋ฅผ ์„ค๋ช…ํ•  ๋•Œ ์œ ์šฉํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. (Useful for explaining the ripple effect of a problem, meaning "not stopping at ~, but going further.")

~์™€/๊ณผ ๋ณ‘ํ–‰๋˜์–ด์•ผ ํ•œ๋‹ค: "~์™€ ํ•จ๊ป˜ ์ด๋ฃจ์–ด์ ธ์•ผ ํ•œ๋‹ค"๋Š” ์˜๋ฏธ๋กœ, ํ•ด๊ฒฐ์ฑ…์„ ์ œ์‹œํ•  ๋•Œ ๋‹ค๊ฐ์ ์ธ ์ ‘๊ทผ์ด ํ•„์š”ํ•จ์„ ๊ฐ•์กฐํ•  ๋•Œ ์‚ฌ์šฉ๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. (Used to emphasize that a multi-faceted approach is needed when proposing solutions, meaning "must be carried out in parallel with ~.")

~๋ฅผ/์„ ์•ผ๊ธฐํ•˜๋‹ค: "~์„ ์ผ์œผํ‚ค๋‹ค, ์ดˆ๋ž˜ํ•˜๋‹ค"์™€ ๊ฐ™์€ ์˜๋ฏธ๋กœ, ๋ถ€์ •์ ์ธ ๊ฒฐ๊ณผ๋ฅผ ๊ฐ•์กฐํ•  ๋•Œ ์‚ฌ์šฉ๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. (Used to emphasize a negative outcome, meaning "to cause or bring about ~.")

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